Fand
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Post by Fand on Jun 30, 2006 12:55:00 GMT -5
He squeezed his fingers around the damp earth, holding his breath as he waited for the wave of raw emotion to pass.
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skye
Senior Writer
cuz i'm not afraid of dying if you're loving me to death
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Post by skye on Jul 7, 2006 0:12:44 GMT -5
Cracking the screen door just wide enough for her to slip through, she tiptoed outside and slid it shut behind her; as soon as the stone patio under her bare feet was replaced by cool, midnight grass, she began to run blindly across the lawn. Imp - It seems like there is an excess of adjectives in your last posted sentence, but mine above probably isn't much better. Fand - I liked yours a lot, especially for being so short and concise!
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Post by Deloclya on Jul 7, 2006 0:58:28 GMT -5
Her eyes bulged with terror and she forced herself to breathe, to think; this was really the end, and she was out of ideas and saviors.
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Bjorn
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Post by Bjorn on Jul 7, 2006 1:17:33 GMT -5
Darkness enveloped his vision, and as the warmth of life ebbed from his body he realized what he had done. "Too late..." he thought, "now I burn..." And with those last words his spirit spireled towards the Christian Hell he had until his final breath disbelieved.
I dunno. I think I may have added too much, and perhaps over-thought this one...
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Fand
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Post by Fand on Jul 7, 2006 10:52:41 GMT -5
She looked down at the unconscious winged boy and frowned as he clung to her hands, whimpering with fear at whatever haunted his nightmares; perhaps, she mused, they're human after all.
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