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Post by Crysi on May 29, 2006 0:11:53 GMT -5
Samantha,
While you are closer in your story, and I applaud your efforts, I must remind you that I must remain hidden in the chapter, if possible. Your hinting is absolutely horrendous. Do not make me take things into my own hands once again.
~Saphirus
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fishr
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Bennington Monument - Col. Seth Warner - Fought with Green Mountain Boys; captured Fort Ticonderoga
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Post by fishr on May 29, 2006 16:15:06 GMT -5
(Laughs at the above.)
Madam,
With words todo, hunger, and standing outside in the chill of March, when will the Massacre be finished?
Sincerely, John Hancock
-- Dear Hancock,
Uh... I'll get back to you on that. *run and hides*
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Joeducktape
Novelist
Hehehehehehe... MUAHAHAHAHAHA!
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Post by Joeducktape on May 30, 2006 18:39:24 GMT -5
To whom it may concern,
I know that you are trying your best to be a good writer and all, so may I make a suggestion? I'm one of the main characters. You want the reader to sympathize with me, not hate my guts. You keep pitting Kyra and I against each other. The reader will hate us both! You should find a writer's forum where people can help you out, and critique your writing. I hear The Young Writer's Society is nice.
Sincerely, Eli
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fishr
Writer
Bennington Monument - Col. Seth Warner - Fought with Green Mountain Boys; captured Fort Ticonderoga
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Post by fishr on Jun 15, 2006 17:54:46 GMT -5
Dearest Fishr, I would like congratulate your efforts but may I inquire why my history has become more dismal? I understand your intentions. I now have a much more concrete identity but of all the aspects of my life, I disagree wholly with how my father has been interpreted. Although, whilst I contemplate, I suppose you were correct, and it is understandable how I have chosen to raise Samuel. I am sure, the changes that follow, rest assured that I will be present and ever watching for mistakes. Luck, Fishr. -Welcome --- *blinks* Dearest? I'd thought by now I would have been a walking bulls eye or least I would have been poke by a fork. Ya know, of all my characters, you really are the most complicated of them all! You start out congratulating me, yet you're clearly not happy. Do me a favor, make up your damn mind! Sheesh! However, you're right. Your traits are in depth, and there is a big reason for those escalating mood swings, which you will find out. That, and the infantry you hailed from. Enjoy.
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Post by Crysi on Jun 22, 2006 1:33:53 GMT -5
Samantha,
You already know your success; I will not comment on that further, except to say you are now working at your expected level. I must warn you that you are horribly unprepared for the next section, so perhaps you should learn to outline. You will finish the first chapter easily. Use the momentum to see what is ahead. If you continue your discipline, and only if you continue it, you will meet your goal.
~Saphirus
P.S. Your mention of me is much better, and I applaud you for planting an excellent red herring. You are learning. I approve.
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Post by Writersdomain on Jul 4, 2006 11:09:48 GMT -5
Stev,
If you think I have not been looking over your shoulder while you plot against me, you are wrong. I have risen to power despite your heavy hand and I will remain on my throne; my plan shall succeed. With your aid, every last detail has fallen into place and now that I have no need of you any longer, I shall place you aside and allow my plans to unfold. Steer clear of my path or I will do more than put you aside.
- the queen ~
Dear Little-miss-queenie,
Heh, not if I or Strick have anything to say about it. I find your threats immensely amusing. You are intelligent enough to create your own schemes and wrap my characters in web of disaster, but are not discerning enough to see the doom that has already encircled you. Enjoy your reign while you have it.
- your queen - Queen Stev
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fishr
Writer
Bennington Monument - Col. Seth Warner - Fought with Green Mountain Boys; captured Fort Ticonderoga
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Post by fishr on Jul 4, 2006 22:20:37 GMT -5
Bofton, 1770
Fishr -
Speed is not a virtue, is it? I am still hungry, chilled, and in all sincerity, I would like very much to press onward from the Meetinghouse to the Green Dragon Tavern.
The nine of us, including myself, have waited patiently long enough. When will it be, the finishing of the scene? -Hancock
---- Dear Hancock,
All in good time but first things first, and that's a complete makeover. Besides, as the rest of you mooches know, it's the most important scene, and it has to be approached VERY carefully.
In other words, have Franklin invent ya'll down jackets with goose feathers, and you won't freeze to death. -fishr
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Fishr -
You are spiteful. -Paul
---- Revere-
Sorry. -fishr
(Heh. My characters are a tad unhappy with me.)
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Post by Adam_Atlantian on Jul 6, 2006 23:42:22 GMT -5
Adam, If you leave me stuck in one spot for another month i will come out of this page and light you on fire. I love the world travel but please keep us moving. And Chris needs more lines. He cant keep being the little guy. You saw how fast he is.
Please tell me why on Earth do we have to go through the Amazon. I mean you said there are creatures. Dangerous creatures and a violent tribe.
You better hope we make it out of there alive. And please expand a little on some of my thoughts. I think a lot more than you seem to think.
And one more thing...Thanks for getting Alice to Kiss me. I hope this is going to shape into something nice for me and her. And don't hesitate to put a steamy amazon Love scene in ther somewhere. I am almost 18 ya know.
-Colin-
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Post by Deloclya on Jul 7, 2006 0:37:39 GMT -5
Meg,
I know you really want to move on and work on the second and third books. I've seen your many outlines and ideas, you're having fun. congratulations. they suck though, you need to work on them. but more importantly, stick to the first book, please. I have to get through those before I can even think about the next two.
Just finish the chapters that need to be finished, [6, 8, 11, 10, 12, 14, the Epilogue...] rewrite the ending so the CORRECT character finds me, and let me reiterate, the Epilogue is much needed. I mean come on, the book as of now ends on "and then darkness". Ew. that's how the first chapter ends. Can we be a little more creative please?
Oh and on a side note, I hate you. Why did you have to put in the part where I kiss Kaleb? Please Please Please find a different way to portray that, so it doesn't look so much like me in the spurr of the moment... Because it wasn't! it was both of us.
And very clever of you, to show my love interest in Damian AND Kaleb. Just sets the reader up for even more disappointment when you ruin my life at the end of the first book. If i ever find out which of those idiotic vampires did that to me, I swear to god I'll rip out his trachea and put it in the smoothie maker.
But on the bright side, I'm not there yet. You're still working on hardcore editing so I'm safe so far. Just please, get a move on. You have this summer to write the first novel. Only this summer. By August 14th [first day of preseason] you better be writing cover letters.
Lovely. All square then? kay thanks.
- Fay
Fay,
I'm working on it. I'm not telling you who 'ruins your life' until book three and you're in for a shocker. trust me. it adds emotional tension and you're going to hate me even more than you already do. but trust me again, things end up okay. well, as of now, but don't get too comfortable or I might kill you off.
- Meg
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Bjorn
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Post by Bjorn on Jul 7, 2006 1:40:26 GMT -5
Dear Bjorn, Already one monastery has been bled, looted, and is now burning as we finger our gains and slip away across the sea. But now I look uneasily at the gold crucifix I pried free from the cold, lifeless hands of that abott whos head I smashed in. Even in death he protected Christ, or at least a monument to him... What's more I am brought back to that dream I had back in Jutland before heading out here: 'turn back...the road to salvations is near...rebuke your crimes and pay the weregild to the thing for your crime...bear no grudge against God...you will be forgiven...'. Listen: I know this cross is an ill gained treasure and shall be the cause for mine and my crew's destruction...Make me cast it overboard! Let Aegir's wife keep it-she loves gold! There's an idea, what do you say? In return I'll entertain you by smashing in more heads, you had fun with that didn't you? -Your favourite viking, Ingvar Stonehammer Dear Ingvar, Unfortunately the story would grow stale quite quickly if I just made you throw that cross overboard, it being the centre of the story and all, and had you rampage across England smashing in people's heads. And it offend Christian readers, as the moral of the story would be completely subverted. Therefore I am sorry but the tale as I originally concieved it must go on! But don't worry! In the end, it's a win-win situation for you! With lots of tragedy...But readers like that! -Your favourite otherworldly Wyrdsman Bjorn
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.:↑ Mÿth ↓:.
Senior Writer
No! Not a legend, Myth!
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Post by .:↑ Mÿth ↓:. on Jul 7, 2006 6:32:58 GMT -5
Dear Struggling Writer,
I wouldn't want to call you anything else since you have many pen names and such> But could you please rewrite 1934 as I'm fed up of waiting for the exciting bits to come.
Go ahead and listen to whatever music you like, just don't forget me, right.
Cheerio!
Wat.
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Dear Wat,
I'll make this short. I have writer's block again so please leave me alone. Or I might do something I'll regret.
Step back into your pages,
Writer with many Names.
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Post by Adam_Atlantian on Jul 11, 2006 15:54:36 GMT -5
Adam, I'm gonna say this once. GET OFF OF YOUR ASS AND WRITE THE REST OF THE NOVEL!!!!!!!!! NANIL ISN'T GOING TO GET HERE IF YOU DON'T HURRY UP. I'VE BEEN PUTTING MY SUPPLIES IN MY BAG FOR A WEEK NOW. IF YOU DON'T WRITE THE REST OF THIS CHAPTER TONIGHT I AM GOING TO KNOCK THE CRAP OUT OF YOU!! You loving character, Colin
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Reas E'lil
Junior Writer
So Long and Thanks for all the Fish
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Post by Reas E'lil on Jul 19, 2006 16:53:48 GMT -5
Dear Robert, YOU SUCK. Why do I have to die at the end. YOU SUCK, you jerk. sincerely, Ralian
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Dear Ralian, Escuse me. I think I'll kill you right now. I have the pen in my hands. Your friend, Robert
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Dear Robert, You wouldn'r dare. I'll tear you limb from... argh. *gasp*. YOU*gasp*SUCK.
*Ralian is run through and dies. Pity.*
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Dream Deep
Speaker of the Forums
ostranenie
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Post by Dream Deep on Jul 19, 2006 17:33:23 GMT -5
Heh, awesomeness Reas.... ^_^
Dreamy, You have GOT to be kidding me.
-Shan Tefur
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Shan, About what exactly? Kidding you? I... don't...
-Dreamy
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Dreamy, What the hell, you know EXACTLY what! You drag me in here, shove me in some stuffy, blistering hot, smothering auditorium, have me leave and wander the streets of Barduev and you never finish writing the damn SCENE?!
-Shan
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*tries to look innocent, twiddles thumbs...*
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Fand
Writer
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Post by Fand on Jul 19, 2006 20:40:29 GMT -5
Respected Author,
I've been a good muse, haven't I? Stuck by you through the million-and-three incarnations of this blasted story... never got impatient with your writer's block... never pushed my way into scenes I shouldn't be in, never hogged the limelight... asked nothing in return...
And you STILL have yet to write my entrance.
I hate you. And consider yourself de-mused.
~Blayney Finn
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Blayney,
Ha. Ha ha.
*Coughcough* I mean, forgive me, O Patient and Non-Limelight-Hogging Muse. I have been woefully remiss in my duties towards you whilst you have been a paradigm of a muse and deserve to be promoted.
~Emily
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My dearest Authoress,
Sarcasm is hardly becoming in an otherwise bright young woman.
~Blayney Finn
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Blayney,
Stop sucking up. You'll get your scene when you get it. If you really want to appear, try convincing Aneurin to WORK WITH ME A LITTLE. And then remind yourself to practice what you preach.
Yours most lovingly, Emily
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